Wednesday, February 22, 2012

The First Bomb

If this story were to become a book, and you, reader, were to pick it up off the shelf at a lovely Barnes and Noble store and turn it over, as one usually does with a new book, this is what you'd read:

"Dylan doesn't like people. If being socially awkward was a profession, than she'd have no problem deciding what to do after ending school. Unfortunately, it is not. Instead she decides on a "fascinating" career studying the "wastefuls" (people of the past who ruined the world by using up all of their resources, and then killed each other off in panic that led to war). The point of the profession being to make sure that her society does not make the same mistakes.

Dylan is told that the career is mostly field work, done alone, or mounds of paper work. She is told that there is little to no interaction with other humans, which to Dylan sounds perfect. However, everything changes when a boy, Alec, shows up in all of Dylan's training courses. When the two are told that they will be partners in an expedition to study uncharted territory, they find themselves on the biggest adventure in history. While camping in a tunnel in the ruins of New York's Central Park, Dylan and Alec get caught in a time loop that brings them back to modern day Manhattan.

While in the past they learn that everything they have been taught about the "wastefuls" is entirely untrue and that their own Government, known as the "Administration," may be keeping a few secrets about how the world was destroyed. With no time to waste Dylan and Alec search for a way to get back to their time to uncover the secrets being kept by the administration. They must get back in the loop before the first bomb drops, or be stuck in modern day Manhattan during a war more brutal than any in history, that will leave no survivors."

PLEASE (!!!!!) Leave LOTS of feedback! I'd love to hear your thoughts!

Thanks for reading!

3 comments:

  1. First, here is the text with my grammatical corrections.

    If this story were to become a book, and you, reader, were to pick it up off the shelf at a lovely Barnes and Noble store and turn it over, as one usually does with a new book, this is what you'd read:

    "Dylan doesn't like people. If being socially awkward was a profession, than she'd have no problem deciding what to do after ending school. Unfortunately, it is not. Instead she decides on a "fascinating" career studying the "wastefuls" (people of the past who ruined the world by using up all of their resources, and then killed each other off in panic that led to war). The point of the profession being to make sure that her society does not make the same mistakes.

    Dylan is told that the career is mostly field work, done alone, or mounds of paper work. She is told that there is little to no interaction with other humans, which to Dylan sounds perfect. However, everything changes when a boy, Alec, shows up in all of Dylan's training courses. When the two are told that they will be partners in an expedition to study uncharted territory, they find themselves on the biggest adventure in history. While camping in a tunnel in the ruins of New York's Central Park, Dylan and Alec get caught in a time loop that brings them back to modern day Manhattan.

    While in the past they learn that everything they have been taught about the "wastefuls" is entirely untrue and that their own Government, known as the "Administration," may be keeping a few secrets about how the world was destroyed. With no time to waste Dylan and Alec search for a way to get back to their time to uncover the secrets being kept by the administration. They must get back in the loop before the first bomb drops, or be stuck in modern day Manhattan during a war more brutal than any in history, that will leave no survivors."

    PLEASE (!!!!!) Leave LOTS of feedback! I'd love to hear your thoughts!

    Thanks for reading!

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  2. Second, I think it's a great premise for a young adult novel. Is that what you're going for? I love young adult fiction, so I'd read it!

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  3. That is exactly what I'm going for! Thank you darling! Also, thank you for the grammatical corrections, once I start typing I have a tendency to put things in the wrong place, or forget them all together. haha

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